Caligula's Launderette

sweet....I really liked the rythm. Wish I could hear the tune... I really liked the last line...that was my favorite. cheers CL

thank you dear. I posted Chapter Two. cheers CL

I like this very much, although I think it would be better if instead of quotation marks you had those lines in italics. but it's your choice. I also agree ...

this caught my attention really early on. I like it alot. I couldn't find any typo's but maybe thats because of this late hour. I'd really like to see more ...

thank you guys a bunch. I really like this poem now I think about it. I tried not to revise it that much except for spelling and grammer mistakes. I ...

no I read to much, trust me. but thanks for the review I'll have to check out some of those books. and Abarat rocks, the second book is even better ...

*whistles between her teeth* that was a good read, it made me think. I'm going to find more of your stuff now. though I think it would be more professional ...

great book, man's an amazing author. my friend is in the middle of reading the second book and he's supposed to lend it to me when he's done.

thank you dear, I post some more ASAP. CL

does anyone watch football? (smiling goodnaturedly) nice poem dear, that game was wicked. I really liked the line "the last time you felt alive i wasn't even born." thats some ...

Chapter Two The long dark hours of waiting set in, Jadyn didn’t want to go out just yet. Scenes haunted her of all the little kids in their costumes mauling ...

thought I would help you out with a proper crit. hope its legible enough. CL

here's my present to you...a proper crit. CL

thank you dear...yeah hell we're all strange. lurf CL

so I promised you a real constructive crit...well I'm working on it working on it. I'll post it some time tomorrow morning. CL